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五月十二日去了一趟英國, 專程到劍橋 G. Davis, 那家幾年前買 Wendy Cope 詩歌錄音帶的書店. 竟然找不著同樣的錄音帶也沒有CD. 經理說過幾天去倫敦幫我找找. 前天回去問過, 連倫敦也找不著了. 那錄音帶大概絕版了.

在湖區華茲華斯博物館買到Poetry, please 英詩朗誦CD, 裡頭有Wendy Cope 自己朗誦两首詩. 請告知住址, 可以寄給你...

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雖然在劍橋 G. Davis 沒買到錄音帶, 倒是買了一二十本詩集. 有Wendy Cope, Boris Pasternak, Marina Tsvetaeva, Dylan Thomas... 真希望多抱一堆, 可惜行李溢滿...

Dylan Thomas, Selected poems, edited with an introduction and notes by Walford Davies 一書找到有關於The force that through the green fuse drives the flower 註解. 不知你看過沒有? 謹抄錄供參考:

The force that through the green fuse drives the flower ◎ Dylan Thomas

The force that through the green fuse drives the flower
Drives my green age; that blasts the roots of trees
Is my destroyer.
And I am dumb to tell the crooked rose
My youth is bent by the same wintry fever. 5

The force that drives the water through the rocks
Drives my red blood; that dries the mouthing streams
Turns mine to wax.
And I am dumb to mouth unto my veins
How at the mountain spring the same mouth sucks. 10

The hand that whirls the water in the pool
Stirs the quicksand; that ropes the blowing wind
Hauls my shroud sail.
And I am dumb to tell the hanging man
How of my clay is made the hangman's lime. 15

The lips of time leech to the fountain head;
Love drips and gathers, but the fallen blood
Shall calm her sores.
And I am dumb to tell a weather’s wind
How time has ticked a heaven round the stars. 20

And I am dumb to tell the lover's tomb
How at my sheet goes the same crooked worm.

The identification of the world’s elemental forces with those which govern the human body, so characteristic of Thomas’s poetry, is in itself clear enough. A greater difficulty would seem to lie in the repeated “And I am dumb to tell…”Thomas is possibly emphasizing the irony that, through physically man is one with the universe; he is separated from it by intellectual consciousness. In other words, the lament is not that he is dumb to tell, but that he can conceive of telling in the first place. In that sense, dumb to tell: also means “foolish to tell”.
1.2 BLASTS: not just” blows on”, but “explodes” (see ’fuse”, l.l).
1.4 CROOKED ROSE: along with the “crooked worm” of the poem’s final line, it suggests Blake’s The Sick Rose.
1.12 QUICKSAND: apart from the obvious meaning, there is possibly a reference to sand pouring quickly through an hour-glass, and a pun on “quick”=living.
1.14 The “hanging man”, being dead, is now genuinely one with the merely physical world to which the poet is dumb to tell.
l.15 HANGMAN’S LIME: the quicklime used to destroy the bodies of executed criminals buried in it.
l.16 THE FOUNTAIN HEAD: apart from the literal meaning, a metaphor for the womb from which time ”sucks ”the newly born.
l.20 The line suggests that, under the pressure of Time, man has invented Eternity— ticking a heaven round the stars, just as a clock’s hands, moving from hour to hour, ticks a perfect circle on the clock face.
1.22 Apart from the primary meaning of bedsheet and winding sheet, the “crooked
worm” is possibly also the poet’s finger moving on the “sheet” of paper on which the poem is written.

楊牧譯文如下：
通過綠色導體驅逐著花 ◎Dylan Thomas 譯／楊牧

通過綠色導體驅逐著花的力
驅逐我綠色的年紀；炸開樹根的
是我為它摧毀無疑。
而我多麼愚蠢居然對那萎絕的薔薇
說我的青春也被一樣的瘧寒扭曲。

就這樣將流水驅逐通過岩石的力
驅逐我豔紅的血；使得滔滔的溪澗
枯竭且將我的所有化火漆。
而我多麼愚蠢居然把嘴對著靜脈管
像對著山泉一樣大口吸。

是那一逕攪動池水的那一隻手
撥弄著流沙；拿大繩套縛飄風的
升黑帆在我的橫桅。
而我多麼愚蠢居然還告訴劊子手
我的肉體是絞刑吏專用的石灰打造。

時間之唇蜎蜎擁向烝在的源頭；
愛既零落也能回收，惟流過的血
將慰藉她療傷以止痛。
而我多麼愚蠢居然還向那季候風說
時間如何已經設定一個天堂在群星當中。

而我多麼愚蠢居然還向愛人的墳說
就是我席褥上也長了一樣萎絕的蟲。

@@ 我猜想,楊牧翻譯此詩(他是我極為尊重的學者)肯定參考過此版本的注解. 他的翻譯我以為是經過多番揣摩的, 多閱讀幾遍, 發現功力高深, 耐讀的. (Hanging man 還有點爭議...還得請教專家)

去過威爾斯 三次, 每去一次對Dylan Thomas 詩 如 Fern Hill….體會更深.

當然 Do not go gentle into that good night 還是最百聽不膩的...

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要怎麼給想當英國綿羊的杜杜地址呢？^^（方便留個email還是就直接以enkaryon@gmail.com聯繫呢？）

還有能買那麼多詩集是件幸福的事，杜杜應該是對英詩頗為熟悉，謝謝杜杜的補充。

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對英詩喜愛，模索中．
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更令我狂喜

Becquer, Lorca,　Antonio Machado, Borges,　Neruda, Ruben Dario, Juan Ramon Jimenez...是讓我心跳的詩人

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謝謝杜杜：

In other words, the lament is not that he is dumb to tell, but that he can conceive of telling in the first place. In that sense, dumb to tell: also means “foolish to tell”.
這段話印證我的解讀：「dumb to tell」的「原意」就是「沒有說出來…」；這是文法問題。

我也記得不知在何處看到過 quicksand也有「人生/肉身」之意，但字典找不到，
你引的這段似乎也印證我的解讀沒錯。1.12 QUICKSAND: apart from the obvious meaning, there is possibly a reference to sand pouring quickly through an hour-glass, and a pun on “quick”=living.

Hanging man 當然不是 hangman。Drive 是驅策，而非驅逐。整首詩譯得荒腔走板….楊 x 的英文程度令人歎氣。台灣英文系所的英文教授的英文程度差得令人拍案驚奇。

總之，感謝您提供的資料。